Jumble of Thoughts
Lauren Malvica
What is it that I had to do?Think… think…ugh I have no idea; watch it’s gonna come to me at the last minute; Okay mom I’ll be right there; how many times do I have to scream that to her before she actually stops asking me; oh crap I forgot to get my gas after work and she is soo going to ask me that right now; and the lightbulb for my breaklights I forgot to pick up too; I’m just forgetting everything lately; I feel like I’m losing my mind; I still have that paper to write I can’t forget to do that; remind yourself Lauren remind yourself; Great I’m going to miss my movie tonight, the one with what’s his name? ... Clive Owen whatever I’ll just record it; I have an hour to get ready before he picks me up; where’s my… Mom?Where’s my lace top with the fringes on the bottom? The brown one?; oh I could kill my sister!; oh snap I forgot to go to the cemetery today.. Joanna’s going to be so mad at me; and my dog, shit I forgot to take Teenie out today she definitely peed somewhere in the house; my room is a disaster I have to clean it before I go out tonight my dad will kill me if I don’t; or he’ll give me his organize speech which will kill me as well; haha; ok so this outfit looks ok I guess.. wha- what is that? A..a pimple !!! this cannot be happening right now I have a wedding to go to this weekend; shit...that’s what I had to do get a dress for tomorrow’s wedding; I knew I was going to remember at the last minute; I can’t believe I forgot that of all things; seriously where has my mind gone; it is gone; I forgot to call Jp and he is calling me right now; I can’t answer I have to get in the shower and fix myself; my hair is a mess; my head is killing me; maybe I can take a quick nap; no no no there is no time for that; maybe just a little one; no I can’t; I’ll be right there mom I’m gunna take a shower first!; she really needs to stop being so annoying; oh good someone loves me I got a text message; Lauren I thought you were going to stop by my house when you got out of work, where are you?; shit THAT’S what I forgot to do today and I had my mind on YOU all day and I forgot to stop by YOUR house; that’s where my mind has been; why couldn’t I remember that? Ok note to self and rule of thumb buy a planner to keep organized, and this will never happen again.
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The entertaining part of this piece is that we actually got into the narrator’s head, or better yet, thoughts. What seemed to be like five minutes could have actually been in a time period of 5 hours or more. There is a lot going on but that is what makes this so random. A reader does not feel congested with thoughts because without the variety, the piece would have come out to be very monotonous if done with one consistent thought alone.
ReplyDeleteI really thought the thing the narrator forgot to do was overall the paper. Then you find out at the end that it’s going to her friend’s house she forgot to do, of course. Any reader would be able to connect with these thoughts. Everyone has had a pimple one day or another. People have forgotten to dress for their upcoming occasion. You have forgotten at least twice a day to take your dog out for its necessities. It’s just a reminder to ourselves that as much as we think we’ve achieved the skill of a “multitasker”, we actually do not and never will.
The pilings of thoughts were just out of random. The writer could have taken the thoughts and mix them around, and the execution would be the same as its original. There was no need of listing them in order or for it to be chronological either. That is what made this piece approachable and appealing