Thursday, February 26, 2009

20 minutes to requiem

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  1. I really enjoyed your essay. First, the way you broke it down into minutes was very clever, I don't think that possibility ever crossed my mind. The whole piece works extremely well for me, I felt each minute pass by and the person's mind running. It's interesting because your character lives by a routine and depends on time and your essay does a nice job showing this process in a more literal way. The description of the donut was very effective, I'm now craving dunkin' donuts. The lines, "MINUTES XVI-XVII, I looked at my watch it was around 8:14 in the morning. That’s when I heard a loud thump on the floor. It was me on the ground after my heart attack", honestly was a shock to me. I wasn't expecting that to be the ended to the essay. When I first read the title I thought what was bothering Nathan during his run was that maybe someone died close to him. You did a nice job using some foreshadowing with Nathan thinking, "I couldn’t figure it out why I felt awkward". I also found it interesting that you didn't leave off with him having the heart attack, you concluded his story explaining that he returned to his routine 2 years later.. I think that was a nice way to end the whole piece. My only suggestion is to make the "rule of living" a little more clear, unless I'm the only one that didn't pick up on it (lol).

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